A fatigued fighter.

sir scowa · 02-13-2007, 03:55 PM

Ok im gona give this a shot and hope for the best...

There once lived a very noble man to look at him you whould think he couldnt even do basic maths but his mind was far more powerful than any ordinary man. some used to say he was a prophet as on day he claimed a womans child would be born blind and to everyones surprise it did.the man one day became sick and people questioned whats the matter with him he answered ''i am overcome with evil ,there is only one way to stop it for not only i am sick right now but there is also...... and the man died.

9 months later ..

The noble mans wife had a child the child was born with abnormalites such as immense upper body strength,his body was ripped and toned like a true warriors this was truly a great sign from avo.....to be continued..

ok i will continue this if you think its good ill edit it up a bit put names in dates etc but it will have a good ending hence the title but need feedback and idaes of what peopl want so let me know....

droded · 02-13-2007, 03:59 PM

Wow, I am looking forward to reading the rest!

+Rep

sir scowa · 02-13-2007, 04:03 PM

realy cool ill work on it any thing you want to see let me kno im all ears...

well not literaly but know..

droded · 02-13-2007, 04:18 PM

I hope more people see this....

sir scowa · 02-13-2007, 04:21 PM

good i got lots of ideas in my head but had to get them out in brief so no one beat me to it...

Vegeta · 02-13-2007, 04:30 PM

Wow really nice!!!! +rep cant wait for more.

droded · 02-13-2007, 04:33 PM

I reckon as a kid he should be like a gentle giant of sorts..

sir scowa · 02-13-2007, 04:46 PM

ill take it into consideration and thanks vegeta mate ant suggestions..

any suggestions*

Vegeta · 02-13-2007, 04:47 PM

you can edit the word you know lol

sir scowa · 02-13-2007, 04:48 PM

oh yeh im new to this but thanks...

Lupus · 02-13-2007, 06:45 PM

no suggestions except Carry on and i cant wait for you to continue lol +rep