[fable freak 37]

ok i'll keep going with the story,make it longer(even though they were the intros and intros are meant to be short)and break it down into pragraphs every chapter.
but i'm not going to make the words more complex unless you want me to say:
super-calla-fraga-listic-ellie-alla-doshis-if-you-make-a-sound-it-might-as-well-be-a-trosious!
now is that grammical enough for ya?
lol.

[L]

Its okay, I like the idea. But the execution of the story itself wasnt as good.

[fable freak 37]

execution of the story?
can u translate that please?

[L]

I'm sorry, the way you told it I guess, or in this case the way it was writtin wasent the best. Still Rep worthy though.

[fable freak 37]

ok thanx and statement noted.
btw i still have a few more intros so here's a heads up:
The Guild
The Legends
The Myths
The Enemys
and The Secrets
so they are all of the rest of my intros that i'm going to write.
so don't say things like break it down into paragraphs or make it longer.
for intros they are pretty long if i do say so myself.
and thanx for saying it's rep worthy cus it's my first fan fic.

[fable freak 37]

thanx you guys for all of your posts.
my upcoming intros will be:
The Guild
The Legends
The Myths
The Enemies
and The Secrets.........
till next time bye.

[fable freak 37]

Chapter 5:The Guild!
The Guild is a place built for heroes to train,eat,drink,play,slee p,find things and become either a master or a legend.The Guildmaster a.k.a the creater of the Guild and formanly known as the first hero ever born is the heart of what makes the Guild mysterious,adventureous and fun.
There are so many wonderous places in and outside the Guild.Such as:

The quest room(where you take adventureous quests),bed rooms(where you sleep),training areas(where you train),forests,lakes,pond s,rivers,the learn room(where you learn strength,skill and will),the cullis gate(which is used for teleportation),the bakery room(where you can make food),the potion room(where you can make potions),the demon doors(where you have to do certain tasks to get permission to enter the great beyonds of wonders) and the gargoyles trove(here lies the most valuable treasure in all of albion).

We have many young heroes and very well known heroes and the legendary heroes(of course they're are hardly ever at the Guild anymore.They only come for quests and then they disappear).

[Shirosaki]

I'm not trying to show off or advertise like blade was (), but if you read my Hybrid Theory, that's apparently a good fan fiction. Try to lay it out in decent paragraphs, watch your punctuation and spacing. Basically what's already been said.

[fable freak 37]

Originally Posted by theron_leroux

I'm not trying to show off or advertise like blade was (), but if you read my Hybrid Theory, that's apparently a good fan fiction. Try to lay it out in decent paragraphs, watch your punctuation and spacing. Basically what's already been said.

ok this is the last time i'm going to say this:
"THOSE ARE ALL INTROS AND I MAKE MY INTROS SHORT WITH NO PARAGRAPHS".so there u have it.
and i still have loads more intros to make.
and this is my first fan fic.
and i'm still learning.

[Shirosaki]

you say it's an intro. It's not an intro to a kids story, so follow literacy. Spacing, paragraphs, decent punctuation.

It's an intro, not notes.

[fable freak 37]

Originally Posted by theron_leroux

you say it's an intro. It's not an intro to a kids story, so follow literacy. Spacing, paragraphs, decent punctuation.

It's an intro, not notes.

ok i'll make a deal with u.
i'll do all of that in my actuall story.

[Shirosaki]

dont make deals, we're only trying to give you advice.

[EmperorofAlbion]

Off Topic Question: Why does nobody read the fan fiction?

[fable freak 37]

Chapter 6:The Legends!
As a hero now you will find loads of mysteries.
So let's skip to why you're here.

The Guild is a wonderous place for you heroes and that is why it is neatly arranged to your liking.Now that you're a hero and you're apart of the Guild there's some things you must know.Things like:Legends,myths,enemie s and secrets.Let's talk about legends for today, shall we?

Ok,as you all know that there were heroes before all of you.
Well I was one of those heroes and so were many others so let me tell you of the legendary heroes first.The first hero was me I was called Guill in my childhood but when I became older I made the Guild which lead to my new name the Guildmaster.

The second hero and much better one was Scythe.He would always go on long adventures and come back without a scratch or any mark on him.The third hero was Will.He would always be making spells and potions and then testing them out in Brightwood tower.

Last but not least was the fourth hero who was called Jack.Yes Jack was a fine man indeed but he got too corrupt and became evil which lead to the begining of our enemies.Then we have to step on to our final segmant on today's agenda which is the legendary weapons.The legendary weapons were brought to Albion by a strange magical force and we have been blessed with these weapons ever since.But after we obtained all of the legendary weapons and after the dissapearance of Jack they had been stolen and we have yet to find them.

Now class that ends today's session on the "Legends".
Don't forget next week we're going to be discussing about the "Myths".

[White Knight]

Originally Posted by fable freak 37

Last but not least was the fourth hero who was called Jack.Yes Jack was a fine man indeed but he got too corrupt and became evil which lead to the begining of our enemies.Then we have to step on to our final segmant on today's agenda which is the legendary weapons.The legendary weapons were brought to Albion by a strange magical force and we have been blessed with these weapons ever since.But after we obtained all of the legendary weapons and after the dissapearance of Jack they had been stolen and we have yet to find them.

Fable Freak, if your talking about Jack of Blades, I thought I should you know that he is a member of the court(Along with the Knight of Blades and Queen of Blades), and was never a part of the heroes guild. But, its your story, I just thought I would let you know.