My Fable 2 Poem

MasterJh · 10-16-2008

Decisions, decisions

What will I become in this mythical land?
Will i become a King both regal and grand?
Will i become a wretch who is weak and old?
Will i become a Hero who's honoured and bold?
Maybe I'll steal and earn the title of "Thief"
And bring all my victims both sorrow and grief.
Perhaps i'll use magic like many before,
Using magic spells and learning ancient lore.
Maybe I'll explore a large distant cavern
Or I'll just end up in a nearby Tavern.
I might make a few new friends along the way
Or i'll be lonely at the end of the day.
I'll always have my faithful companion
Who'll help me on my journey through Albion.

Ok so this is my first real poem that i've written so it is probably shabby but can you guys leave some feedback about it, what you do and don't like. Cheers guys

KiraRose · 10-17-2008

It's pretty good for a first try, I suggest experementing with different styles of poetry to improve. Try writing a sonnet add more metaphors and similies eventualy try writing in iambic pentameter.

MasterJh · 10-17-2008

I understood all that except iambic penetameter but i get what you're saying. Thanks for the feedback

killerequinox · 10-18-2008

Not bad. I liked it.

poopdogy · 10-18-2008

pretty good!

MasterJh · 10-18-2008

I think the last bit sucks (i ran out of ideas at that point)

Zquad · 10-18-2008

Hehe, good one mate

anain12 · 10-19-2008

I think it's a great first try.

Tymolus · 10-19-2008

I like, esp. the line of cavern vs. tavern

topmen · 10-19-2008

I like it

Mail it to lionhead

MasterJh · 10-19-2008

topmen, trust me, game makers are always "Too busy" to reply to anything you send them...I sent a question to a bout 10 guys at Bungie and not one of them replied although i was asking them to send me a copy of Halo 3: Recon so that might be why none of them replied =P

Tymolus · 10-19-2008

Quote:

Originally Posted by MasterJh

topmen, trust me, game makers are always "Too busy" to reply to anything you send them...I sent a question to a bout 10 guys at Bungie and not one of them replied although i was asking them to send me a copy of Halo 3: Recon so that might be why none of them replied =P

Those bastards!

MasterJh · 10-19-2008

Yeah, i did get a reply from one of the Bungie guys when i asked him when the next podcats was gunna be...he said "When it's ready" as if that's gunna really help me

Cobalt Gamer · 10-19-2008

the bungie guys love me!

i asked for help and got it asap, buuuut then i asked for recon and well . . . . . .

moonfever · 10-19-2008

I love it. Great first try.